Sunday, January 22, 2012

DD # 13: Venice is Sinking excerpt

Here's another excerpt from an unfinished project, this one from a few years ago. This is the beginning of Venice is Sinking, which explores a character who goes by the nickname of Jinx. After the death of his parents, he went into a tailspin. Already dealing with a few mental problems, he turns to his impulses and becomes a sort of terrorist without a cause, creating destruction (though rarely killing) just to make himself feel something. While taking a 'vacation' to Europe to let things cool down at home, he meets a terrorist working for a familiar organization. That was about as far as I got so far, but Jinx's following revelations after working with Azize are still floating around the back of my head. Without further ado, here is Venice is Sinking.




Of all places to start—a church.
Even he knew it was absolutely ridiculous, having abandoned his religion years ago, and even his parents had barely been clinging to the last strings of God and the whole system, concentrating more on their family. But yet, here he knelt in the rows of pews, hands clasped in front of him, eyes down. He had counted the wood grains between his wrists, knew every whorl and twist and imperfection. In the three hours he had been there, he had imagined every prayer and desecration performed in his spot, every confession, every man that had copped a feel of his partner while the priests droned on, every child crawling from her seat to inspect the dust beneath the benches, every old man falling asleep only to be nudged awake again by his crone of a wife, and every wide-eyed and loving sheep to God’s herd, soaking in every word of heaven and hellfire.
He…had not prayed.
To be honest, he wasn’t sure that he remembered how. Oh, he could remember all the verses and hymns, he could remember every psalm. The verses had fascinated him as a child, poetic and forceful, but they were only words, and words were of no use to him now.
Hazel eyes still fixed on his hands, the knuckles white from the force of his desire. He didn’t notice right away that one of the priests came to sit beside him. The older man said nothing, merely watching the newcomer and the tension in his shoulders. The lost stranger was still a kid, probably just out of his teens, his jacket discarded and folded neatly beside him, droplets of water pooling on it still from where the snow had melted. Already the moisture had dripped free of his red-gold hair, spotting the fabric on his shoulders and back.
“What troubles you so, my son?”
He couldn’t answer that. Or, rather, he didn’t know the words to say it. The empty, vacant words of love, hope, fire, and brimstone. His eyes were dry, even as he finally tipped his forehead against his fingers, his neck stiff. It was the first time he had really moved since he had come into the cathedral. From his new angle, he could see out the aisle, to the rosy hues cast by the sun through the high stained-glass windows. It was growing late. No doubt they would want to settle his woes before evening mass, lest he disturb the ceremony, and bring something viral and unwanted to this place.
“I am…very alone, Father,” he answered at last, closing his eyes. His shoulders sagged, his body leaning against the old wood now like a puppet with cut strings.
“You are never alone. God is always with you, if you believe in Him.”
It was such a simple answer. And it was not the right one, more words of God and love and companionship and Hell. He heard a faint buzzing from his jacket, and cocked his head just enough to see where his phone had vibrated nearly from his pocket in quiet desperation. The screen had a familiar number, the name Kamin above it. He must have heard at last, coming out of work and searching for his friend, his brother.
“I’m sorry, Father. I have to go.” Was that his weak voice? Were those his hands pushing himself away and taking up his things again, stepping out of the small puddle of water he had dripped away? He stepped through the colors cast by the sun, a faint warmth like the touch of a hand on his shoulder.
The priest stood, too, watching him go, watching him replace his coat and keep his phone clutched in one hand, not answering it.
“You seem troubled, Jacob.”
The man never looked over as he was joined by another one of his brethren, folding his hands into his sleeves and watching the wide door swing closed again in the winter wind, snow swirling like angel’s feathers. “Young people should never have to hurt so, and never touch the one that can help them.”

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